Once Upon A Dream

I like the start I got on this, but it could use some work and I'm kind of please let me know what you think. Oh, and I hate the ...

I could totally see her lying just got me thinking...awesome dark, creepy, sort of etereal imagery. Great work.

I think you could go a lot deeper with some of the ideas in this piece. The language you chose doesn't do your thoughts credit at all. I would get ...

Nice flow to this. Overall very well written. Ummm...other than that, I got nothing. Sorry for my lack of constructiveness :D LUV ur username, btw.

Beautiful imagery and language use...last line was awesome. That's really all I have to say.

Amy Lee Cristina Scabbia Avril Lavigne Janis Joplin Amelia Atwater-Rhodes J.K. Rowling Oscar Wilde My dad My friend's mom

Okay, some revisions. Niteowl, I did take some of your suggestions, but I generally feel that for my work, too many periods kind of breaks up the flow, so I ...

Nice idea, but this piece is very basic. You could develop this a lot more. Tighten it up, add some more to it, be specific. My only specific complaint is ...

The rhyme scheme was too uneven. In some places it was AABB and in others it was ABAB. Also, to be brutually honest, I thought it was your basic cliche ...

I love evanescence...it's time they released a new album, it really is. Everybody's Fool was brilliant, but I was soooo disappointed that the My Immortal released wasn't the one on ...

I agree that "choose" is somewhat overused. Repetition can be good when used properly, but here it just gets redundant. That aside, I really liked this piece. Great emotion, and ...

I agree that the rhyming was kind of inconsistentand choppy. Cool descriptions otherwise though. I do think the piece needs a stronger purpose, though. I mean, if you're just kind ...

Cool title, it really caught my eye. A couple things: Sad were the thoughts then, as the sloop approached me, shredded sails patched with Hades-magic This little section was very ...

You draw me into your words Your thoughts, and your poetry With your blue eyes And I love them. It’s almost a seduction dance When you look at me across ...

I really have nothing to say about this other than I really, really liked it. Wonderfully creative and well written. Excellent.